Subject: [netmod] FW: COMMENT: <draft-ietf-netmod-arch-08.txt>

From: "Romascanu, Dan (Dan)" <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 22 Sep 2010 11:12:16 +0200

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Subject: COMMENT: <draft-ietf-netmod-arch-08.txt>

Comment:
Section 1.1., paragraph 0:
>  1.  Introduction
> 1.1.  Origins of NETCONF and YANG

  Section 1 only consists of Section 1.1 - why not move the content of
  Section 1.1 into Section 1? (Also, I wonder if this history was better
  placed in an appendix; just start with Section 2 directly.)

Section 1.1., paragraph 9:
>    hierarchies defined in other modules, seemlessly adding data at

  Nit: s/seemlessly/seamlessly/

Section 2.2.3., paragraph 12:
>    hierarchy for that area, complete with any augmentated data.

  Nit: s/augmentated/augmented/