Subject: [Simple] Comments on draft-ietf-simple-xcap-pidf-manipulation-usage-01

From: [email-masked]
Date: Wed, 28 Jul 2004 17:40:22 +0300

Most of the comments are nits. When fixed, I believe the draft is ready.

Abstract
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- Change "...as one of the inputs based on which ..." to "...as one of the inputs on which .."

Section 1
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- last para: change "from the Section 4" to "from Section 4"

Section 3
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- The first paragraph references a requirements document that will never be published. Remove the reference to that document. If the PUBLISH RFC has something about the framework. you can reference that instead.

- There is text that say:

"One
   reasonable compositor policy is that the XCAP manipulated presence
   document is used as the default presence state in absence of any soft
   state set by SIP PUBLISH, and the soft state augments or overrides
   the default state."

Remove that text as this draft is not the place for it. It might be that this pidf document published using xcap has the same weight as any other publishe pidf document.

Section 5
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- Remove the second paragraph. It has nothing new.
- You can also reference RPID, CPID, prescaps and future-status drafts in this section

Section 9
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- This section can be removed in its entirety. It duplicates section 5 and has nothing new.

Section 10
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- I believe it is more appropriate to have an XCAP example rather than a PIDF example. Just wrap your example with a PUT http://...

Section 11
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- Lets not recommend implementing basic authentication.

Section 14
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- Remove.

Section 16
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- Remove reference 11.

Thanks,
Hisham

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