Subject: RE: [SPIRITS] WG Last Call annoncement - Pre-SPIRITS CurrentPract ice Document

From: "Lewis Robart" <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 13 Jun 2000 07:24:57 -0500

Thanks to Dave for his original comments and thanks to Hui-Lan for her
response. Telia/Nortel are comfortable with the changes proposed as follows:
*	Comment 7: agree with the proposed word change; 
*	Comment 8: agree with the proposed word change;
*	Comment 9: agree with the comment and Hui-Lan's response;
*	Comment 10: agree to reword as follows: "..., the Telia/Nortel
system aims to allow the introduction of multi-network services without
requiring multi-protocol support." To align with the language of comment 7;

Regards, 
Lewis 

		-----Original Message-----

		> 7.   On page 33, 1st para. This is marketing and not a
technical description.
		> Delete 1st paragraph or reword the 1st sentence as it is
to boastful; try "The
		> Telia/Nortel system aims to allow service providers to
develop the services
		> mentioned."

		Telia/Nortel, please comment.

		> 8.   Page 33 2nd para sentence 2, is there such a word as
"disrtibutivity"
		> perhaps a rewording would help? Possibly as follows:  "The
features of SIP that
		> allow distributed functioning enable these servers to be
hosted, ...."

		Telia/Nortel, please comment.
		 
		> 9.   Page 33 section 6.2 para 2, last sentence, the
original contributed text
		> made more sense, suggest replacing "The specific depends
on what service
		> triggers are being used in the GSM network." with " The
specific way to behave
		> depends on what service triggers are being used in the GSM
network.".

		Point taken.

		> 10.  Page 35 para 1 sentence 1see comment 7. This is
marketing and not a
		> technical description. Suggest delete or reword.

		Telia/Nortel, please comment.