Subject: Re: [tcpm] WGLC on draft-ietf-tcpm-early-rexmt-01

From: "Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-MS00)[Verizon]" <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 22 Jun 2009 11:16:14 -0500

As WG participant, here are my comments; all either editorial or
fairly minor:

(1) In the Introduction, paragraph 2, we have latex-style
    double single-quotes instead of normal double quotes

(2) "When using small congestion windows"
    should more correctly be
    "When the congestion window is small".

(3) "Small windows can occur" ->
    "Small congestion windows can occur"

(4) "Consider a congestion window (cwnd)"
    The document only uses "cwnd" in one other place, in the
    Related Work, so probably doesn't need to define an abbreviation
    for congestion window here.

(5) Need to either define SMSS in this document or cite where we
    pull the definition of the acronym from.  Section 2 possibly
    should have a sentence that says we're going to reuse the
    set of terminology from the 2581bis draft or something like
    that so we don't have to worry about explaining all the state
    variables here.

(6) "good to bad retransmits" ->
    "needed to unneeded retransmissions" ???

(7) check IDNITS :)

In general, the document is very well-written and clear in its
motivation and the description of its mechanisms.  Appendix A is
a useful addition.

---------------------------
Wes Eddy
Network & Systems Architect
Verizon FNS / NASA GRC
Office: (216) 433-6682
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>-----Original Message-----
>From: [email-masked] [mailto:[email-masked]] On Behalf Of
>Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-MS00)[Verizon]
>Sent: Wednesday, May 13, 2009 2:37 PM
>To: [email-masked]
>Cc: [email-masked]; [email-masked];
>[email-masked]; Blanton
>Subject: Re: [tcpm] WGLC on draft-ietf-tcpm-early-rexmt-01
>
>TCP Maintainers & Minor Extenders: The WGLC came and went on the
>Early Retransmit draft without a single comment.  If it really is
>perfect, then someone should speak up and say so :).
>
>As the chairs, we don't have a good feeling about forwarding this
>draft up for publication without any discussion in the WG, so we
>are proposing to hold it here until at least a handful of people
>submit comments on it.
>
>Please review and provide WGLC feedback on this draft so that it
>can make progress:
>http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-tcpm-early-rexmt-01
>
>---------------------------
>Wes Eddy
>Network & Systems Architect
>Verizon FNS / NASA GRC
>Office: (216) 433-6682
>---------------------------
>
>
>>-----Original Message-----
>>From: [email-masked] [mailto:[email-masked]] On Behalf Of
>>Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-RCN0)[Verizon]
>>Sent: Tuesday, April 14, 2009 11:46 AM
>>To: [email-masked]
>>Cc: [email-masked]; Josh Blanton; [email-masked]
>>Subject: [tcpm] WGLC on draft-ietf
>>
>>We'd like to start a 2-week TCPM working group last call on the
>>early retransmit draft:
>>http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-tcpm-early-rexmt-01
>>I don't think the document itself says it, but our charter has
>>this for an Experimental target.
>>
>>WGLC comments would be appreciated by April 30.
>>
>>The document has been cooking for a long time in TSVWG before
>>TCPM took it, and the authors think it's pretty mature based
>>on the progress on it there and in TCPM since it was taken
>>up by TCPM at IETF 69.
>>
>>---------------------------
>>Wes Eddy
>>Network & Systems Architect
>>Verizon FNS / NASA GRC
>>Office: (216) 433-6682
>>---------------------------
>>
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